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Overall, a very good essay, well done.

IELTS Essays band 7

1Advertising is all around us, it is an unavoidable part of everyone?s life. Some people say that advertising is a positive part of our lives while others say it is negative. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Many people wonder about advertisement (advertisements or advertising. This need to be a plural noun or a verb). Some people think that it has negative impact in our life. However, others said it has been playing (others say it has a) as positive effect in this world. This is not an easy essay to be answered, but I will look at this issue. (you should not include this sentence)

Why advertisement has been playing a negative effect in our life ?( try not to ask question in essay) Of Course for several reasons: firstly, it motivates the psychological point in every body especially women. They will run to buy this advertised product especially if it’s from cosmetic roof (what do you mean?), just to show their beauty to men, which will leads to more offender and raped (offenders and rape) cases. Secondly, you can sit comfortably with your family and suddenly the telephone is ringing, nothing important, rather than one of the companies try (trying) to convince you to buy one of their products. It is a real intrusive example of advertisement (example of intrusive advertisement). Lastly, sometimes you do not have the financial ability to buy something, but with these new methods of advertisement, you will(might) run to buy it, which will (could)affect your budget.

On the other hand, there are some good things. Such as, it compares the prices of the most of companies which benefits the consumer. Beside, it really opens our vision to (gives us a chance to) see more products which we do not knowit (would not know about) unless TV and Radio show these things. In addition to (in addition), it cut down our daily routine to see new faces and know more language with daily update for their method of advertisement (advertising).

In conclusion, as we can see there are many aspects to this essay (argument). I feel that there is no benefit at all from advertisement, it plays on minds of people (with people’s minds to make them) buy more thing that they do not need it at all.

Your arguments are good and the paragraphs are well set out but you must be careful making definitive statements, eg ?it motivates the psychological point in every body?, how do you know all advertisements motivate me, for instance?

Overall, a very good essay, well done.

2 Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Capital punishment is always associated with ignorance and intolerance. In fact, we must acknowledge that some people disagree with this kind of penalty but others are totally in favour. Portugal was the first European country to end this kind of penalty. Since the 19th century, tolerance and respect for life are (have been) important values. Moreover, we can affirm that all the Europe (all Europe)remains under the same codes. Maybe because of a religious view point, life respect is a typical value in the Old Catholic world.



Those who are in favour of capital punishment are particularly in developing countries. However, this is not just an image of third world countries. Actually, USA is where this kind of punishment has its higher (highest) rates. The state of Texas, in particular, is at the top, supporting this measure against crime, especially those related with serial killers and those involving children. In a society dominated by fear and government control, it is foreseen that this penalty will continue into a future next (into the future).

Maybe this is not a clear question. As we can see there are several values here and of course cultural behaviours. The roots of the question are religious, cultural, ethical and even geographical. The world is divided and the law systems show those divisions. The solutions, however can lead us to other questions concerning revenge and justice. It will be (Will it be)better to kill a person because of his crimes? Can we admit that life sentence could be a much better sentence? In fact, rehabilitation is the right way especially with an accurate psychological evaluation first. Some people are lost forever, and in my opinion some murderers and other perverted people will suffer more in jail. In this sense, capital punishment is a soft release.


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