The second version is clearer and thus preferable.

Of course, there are exceptions to every rule. What if you are the head of the Global Finance Team? You may want to get your message across without calling excessive attention to the fact that the error was your team's fault. The passive voice allows you to gloss over an unflattering point—but you should use it sparingly.

Application letters and cover letters

Many people believe that application letters and cover letters are essentially the same. For purposes of this handout, though, these kinds of letters are different. The letter of application is a sales letter in which you market your skills, abilities, and knowledge. A cover letter, on the other hand, is primarily a document of transmittal. It identifies an item being sent, the person to whom it is being sent, and the reason for its being sent, and provides a permanent record of the transmittal for both the writer and the reader.

Application letters

When writing an application letter, remember that you probably have competition. Your audience is a professional who screens and hires job applicants—someone who may look through dozens or even hundreds of other applications on the day she receives yours. The immediate objective of your application letter and accompanying resume is to attract this person's attention. Your ultimate goal is to obtain an interview.

As you write your application letter, be sure you complete three tasks: catch the reader's attention favorably, convince the reader that you are a qualified candidate for the job, and request an interview.

Application letter checklist:

Identify the job by title and let the recipient know how you heard about it.

Summarize your qualifications for the job, specifically your work experience, activities that show your leadership skills, and your educational background.

Refer the reader to your enclosed resume.

Ask for an interview, stating where you can be reached and when you will be available. If your prospective employer is located in another city and you plan to visit the area, mention the dates for your trip.

If you are applying for a specific job, include any information pertinent to the position that is not included in your resume.

To save your reader time and to call attention to your strengths as a candidate, state your objective directly at the beginning of the letter.

Example: I am seeking a position as a manager in your Data Center. In such a management position, I can use my master's degree in information systems and my experience as a programmer/analyst to address business challenges in data processing.

A sample letters of application is presented below. The sample is by a recent college graduate responding to a local newspaper article about the company's plan to build a new computer center. The writer is not applying for a specific job opening but describes the position he seeks.

Sample #1

6123 Farrington Road

Apt. B11

Chapel Hill, NC 27514

January 11, 2005

Taylor, Inc.

694 Rockstar Lane

Durham, NC 27708

Dear Human Resources Director:

I just read an article in the News and Observer about Taylor's new computer center just north of Durham. I would like to apply for a position as an entry-level programmer at the center.

I understand that Taylor produces both in-house and customer documentation. My technical writing skills, as described in the enclosed resume, are well suited to your company. I am a recent graduate of DeVry Institute of Technology in Atlanta with an Associate's Degree in Computer Science. In addition to having taken a broad range of courses, I served as a computer consultant at the college's computer center where I helped train users to work with new systems.

I will be happy to meet with you at your convenience and discuss how my education and experience match your needs. You can reach me at my home address, at (919) 233-1552, or at krock@devry.alumni.edu.

Sincerely,

Raymond Krock

Cover letters

As mentioned previously, application letters and cover letters are not the same. A cover letter identifies an item being sent, the person to whom it is being sent, and the reason for its being sent. A cover letter provides a permanent record of the transmittal for both the writer and the reader.

In a cover letter, keep your remarks brief. Your opening should explain what you are sending and why. In an optional second paragraph, you might include a summary of the information you are sending. A letter accompanying a proposal, for example, might point out sections in the proposal that might be of particular interest to the reader. The letter could then go on to present a key point or two explaining why the writer's firm is the best one for the job. The closing paragraph should contain acknowledgements, offer additional assistance, or express the hope that the material will fulfill its purpose.

The following is an example of a cover letter. The sample is brief and to the point.

Sample #1

Your Company Logo and Contact Information

January 11, 2005

Brian Eno, Chief Engineer

Carolina Chemical Products

3434 Pond View Lane

Durham, NC 27708

Dear Mr. Eno:

Enclosed is the final report on our installment of pollution control equipment at Eastern Chemical Company, which we send with Eastern's Permission. Please call me collect (ext. 1206) or email me at the address below if I can answer any questions.

Sincerely,

Nora Cassidy

Technical Services Manager

Translate the following business letters.

# 1

Dear Sirs,

In your letter of 23rd January, this year, you offered us your services in placing our clients' advertisements in magazines published in France.

Our clients welcome the opportunity and should be glad to have full information about the magazines in which you intend to place their advertisements. In particular they want to know the readership, circulation and one-time advertising rates.

A prompt reply will be appreciated.

Yours faithfully

# 2

Dear Sirs,

With reference to the talks held in... in July, this year, between your Mr... and Mr... Commercial Director of..., we are pleased to confirms our readiness to act as your Agents for the sale of your equipment in this country.

Before you send us your draft Agency agreement we would like tore-state the main points of the agreement reached in..., namely.

1. We undertake to operate as your Sole Agents for a period of three years from the date of agreement.

2. We shall receive a commission of...% of all sales of your equip­ment on the contractual territory.

3. You will send us the first lot of your equipment on consignment for a period of 12 months and let us have publicity material (brochu­res, catalogues, samples, working models, films) to arrange a pub­licity campaign. On our part we shall open show rooms in... and..., and place advertising material in our journals and magazines.

4. We undertake to present quarterly sales accounts. Quarterly payments for the sales will be made by an irrevocable letter of credit against our invoices.

We believe the agreement will be mutually beneficial and open up ways for further cooperation.

Yours faithfully

# 3

Dear Sirs,

This is to advise you that we shall no longer be able to deliver you spare parts Nos... The point is that these spare parts are no longer produced. The manufacturing plant has started the production of a more updated type which is in full conformity with the latest techno­logy.

The spare parts to be supplied in the future have a number of advantages. One of them is the fact that the offered model is more reliable in operation.

We ask you to consider our offer and if you have any remarks we shall be ready to discuss them.

We hope that our proposal will suit you. We shall adjust the cost of the spare parts under the present contract on the basis mutually agreed upon.

Yours faithfully

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